I thought I'd post an excerpt from my novel Sleeping with Skeletons today, but first I have an announcement. I finally decided to sign up as a Platform Building Campaigner! I've wanted to do this for quite some time but just couldn't make the leap. Well, I have jumped in with both feet -- just in the nick of time. The Campaign closes August 31st. You'll find all the details at Rachael Harrie's Blog, but it's a Campaign to "link writers, aspiring authors, beginner bloggers, industry people, and published authors together with the aim of helping to build our online platforms." So, if you haven't joined yet, hurry over to Rach's blog and sign up! Time is running out! Here's the link. There is also a badge farther down on the page that links to Rach's blog. http://rachaelharrie.blogspot.com Now a little about the excerpt from my novel Sleeping with Skeletons. It's not one I've posted before. Sleeping with Skeletons was originally a thriller centering around espionage, but in order to get it published, I needed to bring it into the romance genre. I think I got halfway there. By that I mean at least 50% of the book has my hero and heroine together on the page. This excerpt fits solely into the thriller aspect of the story. Sorry, no romance here.
Do you read romance? How about thrillers?
Excerpt from Sleeping with Skeletons:
The house was silent. The only sound came from the steady ticking of a lopsided clock on the wall. Shadows draped thickly, enshrouding the room. A light crept along the sleeping figures on the bed and then blinked out. Darkness settled in once more, hanging heavily against the walls and furnishings.
Another flash pierced the room, illuminating the naked couple. Their skin glowed against the glare. It followed the man. His arms and chest rippled with muscles. Tattoos snaked up both arms and continued along his thick neck, ending just below a small, closely shaved head. The light abruptly blinked out and darkness settled in once more.
The couple stirred, stretched, then relaxed back into sleep.
The light came again, finding the woman. It moved across her lean, athletic build, shone against the long black hair that curled over her shoulders, then moved to her eyes and lingered. She moaned softly, brought her hand to her head and turned, burying her face deeper into the pillow. The light followed, fixating on her closed eyelids, finally forcing her to wake. The beacon winked out as she turned to her husband.
“Dammit, Pol, stop fookin’ with the light.”
He shifted, stirring, and turned his head to look at her in the gloom. The only illumination now was a solitary nightlight by the door.
“Wha’?”
“Will ya please stop fookin’ around with the lights. Ya know I canna sleep with ‘em on!”
He propped himself up on his elbows. “And what d’ya mean, girl?”
The woman slapped his bare chest, the smack filling the quiet room. “The lights! Stop playin’ around.”
He turned away and rubbed the skin where she struck him. “Don’t be daft, Kane. I’m not playin’ with anythin’.”
Margaret switched her flashlight on again, played the beam across their startled faces, then snapped it off.
There was a sharp inhalation of breath. The man rammed a hand beneath the bed, only to return empty-handed. “The fook!” he barked.
“Looking for this?” Margaret asked and held up his rifle.
The man moved toward the edge of the bed. “Who the fook are—?”
Margaret darted out of her chair, connecting the butt of the weapon with his mouth. There was a crack and his head flew back.
“I didn’t tell you to get up.”
“Jaysus, Pol!” The woman scrambled across the bed and held a sheet to her husband’s bloodied face. He spat out several teeth. “What do you want?”
Margaret’s left hand reached over the top of the receiver and sharply drew the bolt of the Russian rifle back and let it snap forward with a clack. The rifle now held a chambered cartridge.
“And I didn’t tell you to speak,” she said.
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I know the ending was a bit violent, but I still hope you enjoyed the excerpt. Feedback appreciated, but since it's published, I can't really change anything. :-)

22 comments:
I enjoyed the read, excellently written,
Yvonne.
Hi Yvonne, thanks!
hope he has dental insurance :)
Your writing would be quite difficult to translate, since you use only short sentences and you don't use a lot of relative pronouns, gerunds or even infinitives to connect clauses and make long sentences (AT least in this passage). This is why your flow of sentences wouldn't be easy to translate.
Definitely makes you want to know more! WTH?
Glad you joined the Campaign.
Hi DEZMOND, I think dental is provided where he's going.
Hmmm... that's interesting. Infinitives are a little passive for action... perhaps even gerunds. Unfortunately, I don't write literary fiction. My earlier chapters (which are posted at Amazon... hint, hint) would probably be easier to translate. But I kinda doubt it. Thanks for the inside look! That really was interesting.
Hi L.G., I'm so glad it makes you want to read more! Thanks for the feedback.
That excerpt had me wanting to find out what else Margaret did. The campaign will definitely be interesting.
Hi J.L., glad to hear that. Maybe you'll be able to read your copy someday... though I know spare time is in short supply!
You sure can set a scene!
Welcome to the campaign, YAY :).
Thanks Isis! The campaign is cool. I'm glad I finally took the plunge!
Wow, great scene. I definitely wanted to read on. And I love the title!
Hi Cynthia, I'm glad you enjoyed the scene and that it got your attention! And thanks for the compliment on the title too!
I know that book! It's a great book. If you haven't bought it yet, do so! That's an order.
I didn't join this year (I did both previous years) because I just have so much on my plate right now. But, I can't wait to see what she's got planned.
Hi Clarissa, you were one of the first fans of Skeletons! And of course, you're in my acknowledgments under your pen name. Thanks for the marching orders!
I'm not surprised you don't have time for the campaign... I don't even know how have time for everything you're already doing!
Wow. Converting espionage to romance has to be tricky. I enjoyed the sight of your characters laying in bed with the light shining over them. What kind of accent is that? Cool, you finally joined the campaigners. :)
Hi Laila, thanks! It's Irish. The story always had a really strong romantic element. I just had to delete a few chapters and add some others. It didn't really take long -- about two weeks. The hardest part for me was writing the sex scene. I'm old fashioned, and to me, that's private. I did have a 'sex scene' in the original version, but it was only one paragraph and left everything to the readers' imagination. But my editor told me it was boring. I added one paragraph at a time... all of which got the same verdict... boring. Finally, I ended up with about six pages... which means I really have to keep my head down at family reunions and church picnics.
Great extract! I do read romances...
Thanks Talli. Romance is the best-selling genre. Hope you're having fun over at the party!
Fab, I enjoyed reading that. Looking forward to hearing more.
Onwards
Michelle
Hey Doralynn, I'm in the thriller/suspense campaign group. I enjoyed your excerpt - thanks for sharing. Plus I love the look of your blog - the color palette is so appealing. Even though I just got my blog up and running, I want to go rip mine apart and steal your scheme! :-)
Hi Michelle, I'm so glad you enjoyed that! Thanks for popping in for a visit!
Hi Jocelyn, it's great to meet a fellow campaigner! Thanks for your kind comments about my blog. It's a fairly new look for me. I think I did this about a month ago. Glad you like it! Makes all the hard work worthwhile!
Have fun in the campaign!
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